01 January 2004 @ 01:56 pm
Drabble: My Favourite Things  
Title: My Favourite Things
Author: Lilith ([info]lilithilien)
Word Count: 100 words
Rating: PG
Pairing: Lord Voldemort
Prompt #6: Smile
Warnings: None
Disclaimer: I own absolutely nothing.

The splat of flesh falling on concrete, its surrendering squelch sounding like nothing more than a melon dropped from a shopping bag.

The scent of unbridled fear, rich and humid enough to penetrate his malformed nostrils, soaking his dormant sense in fetid dread.

The frantic gasps of life escaping as a mercurial hand encircled a throat, leaving it as dead as its owner.

The cool rasp of a snake's scales grazing his bare skin, the shallow swell of air as its fragile lungs pressed against the pulse point in his wrist.

These were the things that made Lord Voldemort smile.
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[info]tjwritter on March 29th, 2008 06:07 pm (UTC)
Wow! Is it wrong that I have Julia Andrews in my mind right now...?

This was awesome!
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Lilith: hp-deatheaters[info]lilithilien on March 29th, 2008 06:15 pm (UTC)
Not wrong at all, that's exactly the twisted image I was going for. ;)
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apythia[info]apythia on March 29th, 2008 08:55 pm (UTC)
Wow! Very powerful word choices! The first sentence is so well written!
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Lilith: lilith-snake[info]lilithilien on March 29th, 2008 09:10 pm (UTC)
Why thank you!
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[info]spidermoth on March 29th, 2008 09:41 pm (UTC)
I like the staccato of the syntax which gave your drabble a starkness suited to the content. The images were vivid and chilling! Your LV is one evil dude! *g*

[one note, though... I believe a comma after ...frantic gasps of life... would preserve the staccato effect and mimic the breaks of the preceeding lines.]
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Lilith: hp-deatheaters[info]lilithilien on March 30th, 2008 01:06 am (UTC)
Thank you, that's a good suggestion. I'm glad that you enjoyed my Voldy. I like the dark ones. ;)
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